PLEASE correct mistakes if any :)?

[gwynethpaltrow8]

i,
i am not a student of law but in exams i have to write a short story from some words they will give..
i wrote 2 small crime scenes although my english is not good but i tried to write it first
please read and correct mistakes u find in the stories

A 19 years girl named x yz a student of xy z university was raped by seven people on Saturday. According to the police ,a ,b,and his unknown accomplice kidnap her form shopping center and took her to the unknown place where they with four others raped her and on the way they threw her outside a pvt hospital. A person passing by saw her fainted took her to the hospital immidialtey she informed her family who later reported to the police. The x.y.z.policed has registered the case against accused person and started investigations. The culpirts were finally arrested by the polic in x.y.z place and her family filed petition against the culprits for the heinous crime.x.y.z pronounced his verdict after hearing and recording evidences , 6 months imprisonment to the accused persons



A women was killed by her father over the failed of two marriages the accused presented himself to the police station/ (her father is arrested by the police and charged with murder of his daughter )located in the north nazimbad victim’s body has been shifted to the x.y.z for the post martm according to the police her daughter got married 10 years ago with the person named x.y.z but after 5 years they got separated after divorce she married her cuz named x yz but few month back she escaped from her 2nd husband;s house with her ex husband and started living with him when this marriage also did worked she left his house and started living with her parents which agitated his father, case was brought to the court for the prosecution after examining the evidences and listening to the testimony of the witness judge gave his verdict to the accused person is sentenced to 6 year imprisonment

regards,
sarah

Additional Details
actually i have a test of writing a stories on crime so some common sentences which are used frequently like
case was brought to the court for the prosecution after examining the evidences and listening to the testimony of the witness judge gave his verdict to the accused person is sentenced to 6 year imprisonment
this is common and can be fit to every crime scene ..any sentences related to court process..the one i mentioned like that more elaborated,please do mention..i will learn and will write :) hope u got my point
thanku so much in advance for considering

[marlan43]

Hi :)
I don't know if you are doing this in America or in England because spelling of things like center change depening : center = American centre = English

On Saturday *give date* 19 year old girl xyz a student of x z university was raped by seven *specify gender*. According to the police ,a ,b,and his unknown accomplice kidnapped her from *give name of shopping centre* shopping centre and took her to an unknown place where they with four others raped her and on the return journey they threw her outside a pvt hospital.

A passer by saw her collapsed on the floor and immediately took her to the hospital and informed her family who later reported the incident to the police. The x.y.z.police have registered the case against the accused and have started investigations.

The culprits were finally arrested by the police in x.y.z place and her family filed a petition against the culprits for the heinous crime.x.y.z pronounced his verdict after hearing and recording evidences and after the testimony of the witnesses the judge gave his verdict sentencing the accused to 6 year imprisonment.


A women was killed by her father over the failed of two marriages the accused presented himself to the police station/ (her father is arrested by the police and charged with murder of his daughter )located in the north, nazimbad victim’s body has been shifted to the x.y.z for the post mortem according to the police her daughter got married 10 years ago with the person x.y.z but after 5 years they separated.

After divorce she married her cousin, x yz, but after a few months she escaped from her 2nd husband's house with her ex husband and started living with him, however, when this marriage also didn't work she left his house and started living with her parents which agitated his father. The case was brought to the court for the prosecution. After examining the evidences and listening to the testimony of the witness the judge gave his verdict to the accused person who was sentenced to 6 year imprisonment.



These are really just basic improvements so you can add in any 'fancy' phrases that you want :)

Hope I helped.