How would you rate these lyrics?

[ayize]

This is something small I wrote a few minutes ago because I had a lot on my mind and writing is usually the only way I know how to blow off steam. Sorry for venting to whoever reads this, but I appreciate it.

I honestly don't care about my family business,
'cause this ain't family. We aren't in any pictures.
Family gathering, they can't forget us. We weren't invited.
Older sister graduated, but they weren't excited.
We were so close to living out of an Escort,
with a bank account amount sittin' lower than test scores.
What did they do? They sat back and laughed,
at the fact we had no home and were strapped for cash.
My uncle became my aunt's sister-in-law.
Start crying whenever we don't listen to y'all.
Y'all complained about how we weren't visiting y'all,
We throw parties now, but you keep missing them all.
I know I'm not supposed to put family on blast,
but let's face it, my extended family is trash,
with the acception of a few cousins,
Renetra and Trina, two of my true cousins.
I remember when you made my mama cry on the phone.
She didn't care about your feelings, so she told you her own.
How you always loved her bro and sister and favored them.
I know you used to talk about my daddy, you hated him.
You never gave him praise. Hope you know that it angered him.
Put to good use all the hate that you gave to him.
Love the state of Maryland, but never really cared for them,
After you die, I'll never ever visit that state again.

So the question is, how would you rate these lyrics?? I wrote this to a song called Family Business by Kanye West. (Kind of ironic considering the makin purpose of his song was to talk about how great family is). Any way, thanks for reading and I appreciate it.

[bercnan72]

publish it then you modify a later a little bit. it looks a bit too "y'all" to me, so get that straight next time because that is your song.