Would this in-text citation be right?

[osryd]

The author isnt mentioned in my paragraph. (she writes about a pregnant teen who gets kicked out of national honors society and i have to respond by stating if i believe personal behavior should affect how youre treated at worl_
I'm also using my own comparisons so should i move each citation to the end of the summary of what the author wrote before I use my own examples?


In this case, Arlene Pfeiffer, got pregnant. Now her story is a little different because she wasn’t like one of those teens you’d see on MTV’s “Sixteen and Pregnant.” Arlene was in her senior year, she was an honor student, and a class president. Not only did she keep her child, she wanted to remain in school and refused to let the fact that she had a child, give her a reason to drop out. I think the actions taken against her should have been different. She should have been used as an example of determination. The reason being, she made a mistake but refused to let it get in the way of her education. She found a way to balance her daughter, Jessica, and her school work. Myself once being a member of the National Honors Society, I know that as an individual you are to demonstrate character. Arlene showed this trait, more than your average member can. She showed it morally, by opting out of the abortion option. She also remained in school, kept up with her grades, and was determined to have a successful future. Say you were a representative at company that spoke highly against drinking, and your boss confronted you about a rumor that you were drunk at a bar and stripping, of course you immediately denied it. A few days later your boss pulls you into his office and shows you pictures of you not only drunk, but stripping on the internet. You then deserve to be fired. You lied about your actions, and continued your behavior. You belong to the company and you’re a walking advertisement. Your actions fall on the companies shoulders and if they have a negative impact, proper action should be taken depending on the severity. Everyone deserves a second chance; it is what you do afterwards that determines your treatment. Arlene made a mistake, admitted to it, and didn’t let it overcome her and continued to pursue a good future. The sales representative continued her undesirable behavior. (Goodman 16)

[seager]

yes