Is my idea for a book good? How can I improve it?

[chatima]

The main character is a 14 year old boy with shadowy and stormy, sage green eyes. He has curly auburn hair and soft, lightly tanned skin. He smells like smoke and walks with a limp. He is a very inappropriate boy, he is very lazy, abusive against family and friends, mainly interested in himself, is very humorous, and is very influential.
When his family moves from the coastal town of Ocean City, of which his family always lived. He would always miss the beach vacations and summer days of watery fun. His parents gave him a wolf’s tooth for him to get excited about where they would soon live. When they moved there he fell in love with the area and his tooth becomes his prize possession. Through the rest of elementary and middle school he got straight A’s. The laws of the town were to stay away from impurities. No one ever realized he would get into this. His parents thought sending him to a better school in the next town over would help him achieve even more. He has always been the model student, that’s why when he got into the bad crowd the town leaders tried to turn the other cheek.
Within one month of attending his new high school in the neighboring city, he begins to hang out with a bad crowd. He starts losing his good grades and he takes up drugs. His family find out and become very concerned in his health. They send him to a rehab camp. In two months more he comes home drug free. But he has joined an out of town gang. In the four days he has been back his gang has stabbed two innocent bystanders and robbed a local bakery. The boy soon realizes this isn‘t the right kind of life, but it‘s too late. He has already made a horrible impression of himself to the town. The town decides to have a meeting about the troubles they have had with him. Where he gets banned from the town and is to be sent out alone wearing only the clothes that he was wearing and a wolf's tooth necklace. Before the meeting, his whole family was brutally murdered, but when everyone finds he wasn’t there and was actually enjoying quiet night at the lake, they ban him from the town. He decides he will go to his old town. Once he makes it out of the state he meets a girl who was allegedly running away from her home too. She actually is working with the man who killed his family and is after him. She plans to turn him into the man but she falls in love with him. The night she tries to warn him that the murderer is coming for him, she makes him run away fast and she walks the opposite direction away from where the murder is coming. He runs until he makes it yards from the beach. He hears a gun go off nearby, startled he trips over himself and falls over a ridge and land painfully on a rock he survived the fall but when he landed on his chest the sharp wolf tooth jabs into his chest. He slowly and painfully bled out as his heart pumped dark red blood onto the boulders and he died at the desolate beach of his family’s old ocean vacation spot.

[hyun-su]

He needs redeeming qualities, or reasons why he behaves as he does. I think your focusing too much on physical characteristics like a crutch, smells of smoke - why. Walks with a limp - why, could the reasons behind these characteristic be the reasons why he is so abusive to his friends and family - they better deserve it and as behaving abusively is wrong however sympathetic we feel to him he can still redeem his behavior he just needs to channel the angst more effectively.

i think the town leaders needs to be harsher to him not just banning him but activily hunting him to hurt him in some way but the town need to be the one who can help him i think he must prove to them he deserves help or they need to realize there was a reson they should have helped him reedem himself

why on earth is the wolf tooth so important?

At the moment this is weak, but with working out how to make readers care you can improve it.

[fiynn]

You shouldn't write it online. Someone would steal it.

[veto]

You shouldn't write it online. Someone would steal it.

[chozai65]

Within just the first paragraph I stopped liking it, but I'll tell you why because I think you can fix it. You say the most awful things about him, characters can have flaws but "abusive against family and friends" just makes you completely hate the guy. Plus then you say he's humorous (how is he humorous if he's such a jerk to everyone) and influential (to who? Who would he influence when he's acting like an immature outcast). So basically after that I totally stopped caring about the character, he's to selfish, I would stop reading the story after I lost interest in the main character.