Illegal Drugs should remain Illegal?

by **adelphos** » Thu Dec 01, 2011 12:42 pm

Hi Everyone,

So, Basically I am doing my ISU Outline for Law and I don't know how to write a thesis statement for the topic that I am doing because I can't find much info on it.. So, here is how my thesis starts but I don't know what to add after that:

Thesis: Illegal drugs such as Cannabis, Cocaine and Heroin should remain illegal to use in Canada because making it legal will cause more problems with the drug industries, It has been proven to alter your decisions and make you imperative, like alcohol and lastly we don't need more toxins to be legalized so that children and teens will have more access to it. Canada already has enough problems on their hands.
I think my point 1, 2, and 3 are not very good. Help me reword it or help find better arguments please!!

So, anyone please help me out with this ..
Please & Thank you.

by **osmont** » Thu Dec 01, 2011 12:52 pm

If this is for law school... you should read the Criminal Code of Canada sections on illicit drugs.

1. Cannabis, cocaine, and heroin are not illegal in Canada. They are "controlled substances" which are perfectly legal to possess and use with a prescription and perfectly legal to distribute and manufacture with a license. If you say "illegal drug", it isn't just poor language -- it shows a fundamental misunderstanding of the law which makes the rest of your thesis seem bizarre.

2. "making it legal". "It" is singular, yet the previous sentence said "Illegal drugs" and then listed a three of them out. I don't know if you want to legalize all controlled substances (not that they are illegal), just those three, or just one of them? This looks like a straw man argument. I seriously doubt anyone is proposing making radioactive tracing injections, AIDs medicines, etc. available without a prescription.

3. "drug industries" There is only one "drug industry". When you make it plural, it is confusing about what the multiple industries are supposed to be. Also, "drug" is a generic term. Food is a drug. If you mean the pharmaceutical industry, say so.

4. "more problems" You can't claim this in a thesis. I don't know what existing problems they have. Economic, regulation, lawsuits, marriage problems, ... what?

5. "It has been proven to alter your decisions ..." Again, I don't know what drug you are referring to by "it". Finally, all drugs alter your decisions... so does chocolate, tea, coffee, sun light, vitamin C, etc. Too vague. And why is this bad?

6. "like alcohol". Putting illicit drugs in the same category as a non-controlled substance makes your argument extremely week.

7. "we don't need" Avoid using "we" in writing and arguments. It smacks of claiming authority and you have no idea who the reader is. If you mean Canadians, say so.

8. "toxins" Vague and shows a lack of understanding about basic science terms. Sugar, peanuts, broccoli, and water are also toxins. Too much will harm or kill certain people. Also, cannabis is not a toxin to someone with glaucoma (or most people won't think of it as one).

9. "Canada already has enough problems on their hands." Weak as it is so vague you could say that about anything. Lots of things are problems but we allow them anyway.

This isn't my opinion on controlled substances, just your writing. It is so vague and wrapped in poorly defined words that the only thing I'm fairly sure of is that you aren't knowledgeable on the subject of your own thesis.

by **tanishia** » Thu Dec 01, 2011 12:54 pm

but my topic is Should illegal drugs in Canada be remain illegal and my teacher specifically mentioned those 3 drugs (Cannabis, cocaine, and heroin). So, if they are not illegal in Canada so what am i suppose to talk about in my essay?

by **felabeorbt** » Thu Dec 01, 2011 1:02 pm

No they shouldn't.

And Yahoo Answers is a place for asking questions. If you already think you know the answer (you actually don't, you're wrong) do not post a question.

by **chadburne48** » Thu Dec 01, 2011 1:07 pm

A lot of the illegal drugs should remain illegal, Cocaine can cause aneurysm's. Heroin.... Watch requiem for a dream.

by **leland** » Thu Dec 01, 2011 1:15 pm

Good enough for me. Personally i think if drugs are spotted they should be destroyed on sight.

by **favian** » Thu Dec 01, 2011 1:31 pm

Only Cannabis should be legalized

by **gillivray5** » Thu Dec 01, 2011 1:38 pm

That is really good. You will do really well.

by **gowan** » Thu Dec 01, 2011 1:50 pm

RE: Canada already has enough problems on their hands.

And illegal drugs are one of those problems

Legalizing drugs would eliminate majority of the crime in canada, along with the drug related murders. If the government taxed marijuana they would rake in the dough, and this would be great for the canadian economy. Alcohol used to be illegal during prohibition...do you see anyone getting murdered over a six pack or a bottle of scotch these days...no, you dont, because the government taxed and legalized it. Look at the safe injection sites across canada, they limit the spread of disease, overdose prevention, safety for the community as well there are many marijuana dispensaries that help alot of people dealing with life threatening disease...both go to helping people and the community.

Legalize, legalize, legalize!!!

If people want to abuse it, that it their decision.

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